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Myoungsoo "Mozer" Jung

Issue:

"To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards"

Essay:

Although I sparsely agree with the claim that the effective leader should have the highest ethical and moral standards, I don't concede that these  are the only factors to be considered in identifying an  effective leader. Basically, having a high ethical and moral standards helps leader  deal with nation well. Some people assert that to make a better nation,leaders should do many things such as managing the environmental problems, protecting the consumers, and serving an excellent welfare   as criteria for having a highest ethical and moral standards. However, before considering that, an effective and successful leader should have other abilities which are essential to improve a nation.

First and foremost, I believe that not all people who have high ethical and moral standards are effective leaders. There's a possibility that even if  someone has those aspects , he or she might not have other significant  abilities such as business management or political skills.  A leader does not only decide on what is right or wrong but also thinks about what is  best for his people and nation. There are times that a leader should be very tough which is unethical but if it is needed, then he has to do it.In making plans for the betterment of one country, a leader should have a knowledge both in business and politics.

Moreover, in addressing this issue,  it is helpful to consider the  three distinct forms of leadership: business, political, and social activity. First, in the business realm, the main goal of  a leader must be  beneficial to the nation. Actually, there is a lot of considerations in business region. A leader  not only tries to compromise with the associate  country but also contemplates on how to protect the consumers as well as providers or knowing  the methods  to minimize the environmental hazard. The common sense tells us that the most important of all is the good desire of a leader for  the nation. It is human nature to protect his family or group instead of others. With this reason, a successful leader can yield his or her national policy sometime.

Furthermore, we don't consider only moral and ethical standards when we evaluate historical famous leaders. All around the world, most respectful leaders did a lot of great works but some of them didn't have these standards. One example is Park, Jung-hee, who was a president of my country. He was an excellent leader even if he wasn't a very ethical and morally upright person . Most citizens of South Korea think that he enhanced the economic status and built fundamental infrastructures well which made our country   more advanced. Actually, his plan gave us a lot of benefits although we suffered from  poverty after the Korean War.

In conclusion, it is very significant that a  leader must have highest ethical and moral standards. However, becoming an effective and successful leader is more than that. To become a better leader, we should also consider  numerous skills of leadership such as political, business , and so on. With this reason I don't think the claim is perfectly true even if I partially agree with it.

Myoungsoo "Mozer" Jung

Topic:

A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per day, whereas North Americans eat virtually none. It turns out that soy contains phytochemicals called isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Thus, North Americans should consider eating soy on a regular basis as a way of preventing fatigue and depression.

My opinion:

The author asserts that North Americans must consider eating soy regularly to avoid fatigue and depression. To support this argument, the author refers to the study that compares how much chronic fatigue and depression do  North Americans and Asians suffer. The author finds out that Asians eat on the average of 20 grams of soy per day. Consequently, It helps to prevent disease because soy contains phytochemicals called isoflavones. However, this argument has numerous flaws in several aspects.

First, the author assumes that the recent study dealing with  the different rates of chronic fatigue and depression  between Asian and North American is reliable. However, this study doesn't provide any evidences or testimonials to substantiate the claims of the said study. It is entirely possible that the reason why North Americans feel such illnesses more than Asians might be that recently, the work atmosphere now  compared with the past gets worse to work comfortably. Also, it might be possible that North Americans suffer from the stress more than Asians because they undergo significant inflation of economy. Without considering both, the author's supposition lends less credibility to me.

Second, the author relies on the poor assumption that the difference, which is described on the   said study, only comes from eating soy. The author overlooks other  factors which might cause the  above mentioned diseases such as environment, gender, ages, and so on. For example, North Americans' physical body is larger then Asians. With this reason, they need more time to retrieve the fatigue and depression than Asia. In addition to that, North Americans feel fatigue and depression more quickly because North America's weather is hotter or colder than Asia. Without these considerations, the author's assumption is unpersuasive to me.

Even if the result turns out to be reliable, the author infers too hastily, on the basis of the fact of which soy contains phytochemicals called isofalvones. In other words, the author is confused with the correlation between the effect of preventing diseases and avoiding chronic fatigues. Admittedly, preventing diseases and chronic fatigues are different. For example, the fact of which someone strengthen their immune system to prevent a certain disease, cannot guarantee in preventing fatigue and depression. It is equally possible that they can feel fatigue and depression more due to excessive exercise. Without this consideration, such argument is unconvincing to me.

In sum, the argument is unpersuasive to me as it stands. To bolster it, the author should provide clearer evidence that lack of eating soy results in the chronic depression and fatigue to North Americans. Moreover, the author must also provide assurances the result of such study only comes from difference with eating soy. To better assess this arguments I would need the detailed information about the testing conditions

Myoungsoo "Mozer" Jung

Topic:

Milk and dairy products are rich in vitamin D and calcium, substances essential for building and maintaining bones. Many people therefore believe that a diet rich in dairy products can help prevent osteoporosis, a disease in which the bones weaken significantly with age and that is linked to both environmental and genetic factors. But a long-term study of a large number of people has found that those who have consistently consumed dairy products throughout the years of the study have a higher rate of bone fractures than any other participants in the study. Since bone fractures are a symptom of osteoporosis, this study result shows that a diet rich in dairy products may actually increase, rather than decrease, the risk of osteoporosis.

My opinion:

The author concludes that the fact of which taking milk and dairy products might raise the risk of osteoporosis even if many people believe that dairy products can help to avoid such disease. To bolster this, the author cites a study that proposes the fact of which eating milk and dairy products increases the rate of bone fractures.  In addition , the author states that bone fracture is a symptom of osteoporosis. However, this arguments has numerical flaws in several aspects.

To begin with, the author confuses the cause and effect on the basis of correlation between diet rich in dairy products and bone fractures. Although taking daily products is connected with such symptom, it doesn't necessarily indicates that eating a milk or daily product results in the bone structures directly.  Actually, the result of this study indicates that the participants have the higher bone fractures rate than others. Basing upon this reason, the result doesn't imply that osteoporosis is higher if people consume a diary product. In my opinion, the reason why people consistently take milk and daily product is that they can get enough  calcium and vitamin D, which help strengthen their bones and it has been proven by many nutritionists. Without resolving this confusion, the author's supposition lends less credibility to me.

Second, the author assumes that the result of the said study is statistically unreliable. However, the study doesn't provide clear information about the test conditions to support its result. It is totally possible that the number of people, who participated in the test, is too small to represent all people  . So, we can't say that the test is reliable. Moreover, the criteria of selecting group samples such as ages  and gender or something like that is unknown in the argument. With this reason, it is entirely possible that the different results come from variable testing samples. Without considering these possibilities, the author's assumption is unreliable to me.

Even if the result provides the clear information  in testing this study,  the author relies on the poor assumption that the bone fracture rate of people who eat the daily product continually is higher. It is entirely possible that the disparity of study comes from other factors. For example, one group is under poor housing or nursing systems, and another group resides in a better particular system with  safety. In this situation post group has the possibility to  avoid the bone fracture more than the preceding group. Without considering this possibility, the argument is unconvincing to me.

Finally, the author depends on the poor assumption of which the osteoporosis disease only results in the bone fracture. It's because the author overlooks the possibility that other factors affect the increase of  the bone fracture. It is equally possible that the bone fracture comes from the excessive exercise or work. In addition to that, the bone fracture might occur because of  environmental phenomena such as typhoon, snowfalls, and so on. Moreover, there's also greater chances on the genetic aspect of which osteoporosis can be inherited from members of the family especially from the ancestors. Without considering either cases, the author assumption is unpersuasive to me.

In conclusion, this argument is unreliable to me as it stands. To bolster the author assertion and supposition, he should provide clearer evidence that consistently taking milk and dairy products is noxious to  the bones and might lead to osteoporosis. To better assess this argument, I must be informed about more accurate and detailed information of testing this study. In addition to that, the author must guarantee the that bone fracture is only affected by the osteoporosis.

Myoungsoo "Mozer" Jung

The topic:

The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Alta Manufacturing.

-"During the past year, Alta Manufacturing had thirty percent more on-the-job accidents than nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts believe that a significant contributing factor in many on-the-job accidents is fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Alta and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that our employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."

The vice president concludes that Alta Manufacturing's work shifts must be shorten by one hour to reduce the on-the-job accidents. It will as well help to raise the productivity of Alta. To support the conclusion, the vice president points out the fact of which Alta Manufacturing had thirty percent more on-the-job accidents than Panoply. The Panoply has one hour shortened work shift system. The vice president also cites that experts believe that the lack of sleep and fatigue can  cause more on-the-job accidents. However, the author's conclusion and assumption has numerous flaw in several aspects.

First of all, the author unfairly assumes that the statistical information, which deals with the accidents rate, is reliable. It is equally possible that the accident rate per worker at Alta is lower than Panoply even if Alta has on-the-job accidents which is thirty percent more than Panoply, last year. In other view, it is also entirely possible that a certain company, which has same working atmosphere with Panoply, has the higher accident rate than Alta Manufacturing. Without considering these possibilities, the author' supposition is unreliable to me.

Second, the vice president depends on the poor assumption that the fact of which Alta Manufacturing's on-the-job accidents is higher than nearby Panoply Industries, only comes from the fatigue and sleep deprivation. The author neglect other possibilities that Alta's facilities and environments of the workplace are too old to prevent the labor mishaps . For example, the machine doesn't work well, and it has some error to operate because it is worn-out. In addition to that, it is totally possible that the education about security and safety, is insufficient to workers. For instance, some workers don't know how to operate their machine. Consequently, accidents can arise in fields. Without considering the these possibilities, the assumption is unpersuasive to me.

Third, the author assumes that the productivity can boost by shortening the work time. The author overlooks another possibility to improve it. Admittedly, it is equally possible that reducing the price of resources helps enhance the productivity. In addition to that, Alpha can improve the productivity by enhancing the processing of products or adopting the effective machine. Without these possibility, the assumption lends  less credibility to me. 

Finally, the author overlooks the possibility that employees might not use the time to sleep or cope with  their fatigue expectedly. For example, employees might spend time to enjoy their hobbies such as watching a movie, reading a book or something like that instead of sleeping. In this situation, shortening working hour doesn't guarantee in reducing the on-the-job rate.

In conclusion, the arguments is unpersuasive to me as it stands. To bolster the vice president's conclusion, the author should provide the clearer evidence that shortening working hour can reduce the accident rate. It will as well improve the productivity of Alta Manufacturing. To better assess this argument, I should be informed about the accurate information dealing with Alta' on-the-job accidents.

Myoungsoo "Mozer" Jung

Revised by Iris Gayle Valerio

The topic:

The following appeared in a memorandum from a dean at Omega University.

-"Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by thirty percent. Potential employers apparently believe the grades at Omega are inflated; this would explain why Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors."

My opinion:

The author who is a dean at Omega University, asserts that Omega university should terminate the student evaluation of professors because it will help graduate students to get a job successfully. To bolster this assertion, the author points out that the overall grade averages of graduate students have been inflated by assigning the higher grade than the original grade. In addition to that, the author assumes that inflation of grades has resulted in loosing a chance to get better jobs compared with Alpha University. However, this memorandum suffers from numerous flaws in several aspects.

First, the author depends on the poor assumption that the fact of which the reason why the overall student averages have been risen by thirty percent comes from the student evaluation. However, the author overlooks possibilities that the other factors  can be contributed to the rising of the overall student grades at Omega. For example, current graduate students are smarter or they sincerely take effort to achieve the excellent grades more than those who entered Omega fifteen years ago. It is entirely possible because students might take an excellent scholarship from Omega. Without considering these possibilities, the dean's assumption that the evaluation procedure result in the rise of the average grades is unpersuasive to me.

Second, the author assumes that the reason why the graduate student's ratio of getting a job is lower than Alpha is due to inflated average grades. However, the author didn't consider other possible reasons, which result in poor job-placements. For instance, Omega university fails to adopt state-of-art facilities which are required by current companies. It is entirely possible that inappropriate education coming from failing to analyze the demand of companies, cannot meet the requirements of the gradutes to be hired.It might as well explain the reason why students suffer from the lower job-placement rate. Without regarding these possibilities, the author supposition is unreliable to me.

Finally, the author's supposition is based on the fact of which employers only consider the grade to decide in hiring employees. Actually, when employers evaluate the perspective employee, there's a chance that they look at other possibilities of applications. For example, they may consider the perspective employee's attitude, practice, aptitude, and so on. Moreover, to improve the job-replacement rate, there are other approaches instead of expiring evaluation. For instance, the rate can be improved in terms of adding new curriculums which reflect to the industrial demand or strengthening the carrier-preparation services or something like that. In either case, the dean's assumption and claim lend a little credibility to me.

In conclusion, the argument recently is unpersuasive to me as it stands. To bolster the argument, the author should suggest clearer evidences that the student evaluation procedure result in the inflated grade, and subsequently graduate students cannot take a job well . To better assess the argument, the author must provide the more reliable accurate proof which describes how many students participate in the evaluation process and level of career preparation service at Omega.

Myoungsoo "Mozer" Jung

Revised by Iris Gayle Valerio

The topic:

The following was written as a part of an application for a small business loan by a group of developers in the city of Monroe. –

"A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. It is clear that the C Note cannot help but make money."

My opinion:

The authors assert that the proposed jazz music club in Monroe can be stupendously profitable. To support this recommendation, they point out that there is no jazz club within 65 miles from Monroe. It basically means that it will be the first jazz club within that area so, there will be no competitor. Moreover, the authors mention that jazz is very famous in Monroe because of the following reasons: firstly, last Summer more than a hundred thousand people attended Monroe's jazz festival; secondly, some famous jazz musicians live there; and lastly, the highest-rated radio program plays jazz music. In addition to that, authors say that a typical jazz fan spends around $1000 per year on jazz entertainment. However, this assumption suffers from numerous flaws in several aspects.

To begin with, the author assumes that C Note which is the proposed jazz music club, would have a local market all to itself, and can considerably make a lot of money. It is based upon the fact that the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away. In my opinion, Monroe will have already at least one more jazz club within 65 miles if the demand for jazz music is high enough to build jazz club . In other words, benefits of building the proposed jazz club can't be not guaranteed. Without considering this possibility, the author's recommendation lend a little credibility to me.

Second, the authors depend on the poor assumption that the fact of which myriad people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, guarantee the profits of the proposed jazz club. However, the authors overlook the possibility that the people who attended the said festival include those who don't reside in Monroe. Moreover, there's a chance that the popularity of jazz last summer will not continue until the time when the new jazz club will be built. In other words, they may not be interested in jazz except last summer. New trends of music may also arise. In addition to that, the reason why some famous jazz musicians live in Monroe comes from certain circumstances instead of the popularity for jazz. For example, the education environment for their children is excellent or the price of estate is available more than any other locations. Without considering these possibilities, the argument is unreliable to me.

Finally, the authors assume that proclivity of jazz fans help the new jazz club get the considerable benefit. If, however, there are entirely possibilities that the revenue level of residents in Monroe is lower than any other states or cities in the nation or the jazz fan who reside in Monroe might spend less money on jazz entertainment. Unless the authors provide clearer evidence that most fans of jazz who reside in Monroe have the capability spending the money on jazz entertainment to guarantee the profits of new jazz club, the authors' assumption is unreliable to me

In conclusion, the arguments is unreliable to me as it stands. To justify this arguments, the author provide more clear evidence that jazz is extremely popular in Monroe, and provide the reliable evidence that the proposed jazz club, C Note, can be arise the considerable benefits from Monroe. To better assess this arguments, I need to know revenue level of Monroe.